Dead of Winter

[morrobay1990]

Title: Dead of Winter
Author: morrobay1990
Warning:
Genre: canon
Word count: 100
Disclaimer: They are AP's
♥ Jack














“Hey.”
“What.”
“What time is it?”
“I don’t know...still dark...middle of the damn night.”





“That was good before.”
“Yeah.”
“Don’t sound like it was good.”
“Yeah.”





“Still wanna talk?”
“No.”
“Could if ya want……get up, get the fire going...”
“Don’t make no difference to me.”
“Come on, Jack……got four more days up here...got time to talk if ya want.”
“Said it don’t matter...’sides I’m tired.”
“Well, I’m gettin up, stir that fire up...kinda hungry, too…maybe get some a
that deer meat outta the truck, you want some?...still some JD in that bottle.“
“………………………………………………………………………………………………open another one, then, if we’re gonna talk.”

Comments

conversation

[joetheone.livejournal.com]

I like the normalcy of this as if they are together all the time. Joe

Re: conversation

[morrobay1990.livejournal.com]

Hi Joe,
Good to hear from you. Maybe I can just keep them together in this cabin for the next 40 years...

Thanks for your comment.

[gwylliondream.livejournal.com]

Yes! Keep them in there for forty years!

That'll get something done!

Nice use of space in this one.

[morrobay1990.livejournal.com]

Thanks, Donna.

Think 40s enough?

[skinheadbrian.livejournal.com]

i know it's not in his nature, but what a wonderful universe it would be if ennis suddenly had an epiphany & mustered up the cojones to give jack what he's always wanted....and himself too, for that matter.

i mean, i know ennis was written a certain way (in canon & otherwise), but it's always seemed to me that if he were a real, living person, one who had never seen what saw & therefore didn't bear that scar, he might have - eventually - come around to jacks way of thinking, y'know?

but... i also know most writers seem to like the angst & anguish that comes along w/ the canon. i'm def in the minority (ie: those hoping for a happy ending :-)

in any case, i've been a big fan of your writing for long, long time & still am. very much.
your ability to create such vivid images & real people with only a few lines, is absolutely
wonderful!

thank you!

.

[morrobay1990.livejournal.com]

Hi Brian,
thanks a lot, I always appreciate your comments, and glad you're still with me 3 years later.

As for happy endings, more people want to see that than stories where Jack is dead, or Ennis has moved on...I don't mind "happily ever after" sometimes, but I live for the angst!

thanks again...

[sjmarv.livejournal.com]

Just want to let you know I's still reading and enjoying this.

Hope they get to really talking.

[morrobay1990.livejournal.com]

Hi Susan,
thanks, and I'm glad you're still along for the ride.

At least they have more JD to loosen Ennis's tongue...

[tizi17.livejournal.com]

i wish the would talk... had talked... oh well.. :(
thank you for those beautiful little images.

[morrobay1990.livejournal.com]

thank you, tizi.

When I first saw the film I really thought they were going to talk, to tell each other how they felt, when Jack said how much he missed Ennis...I guess Ennis wasn't drunk enough to listen to his heart :(

[mazaher.livejournal.com]

Is it just me, or is there a strange sort of tension here? Jack saying he doesn't want to talk... maybe trying to stop himself from taking up once again the topic he can't make himself leave alone, but which always before ended in hurt and heartbreak for both.
It feels to me like Ennis is also worrying: making an attempt at normalcy, yet unwilling to leave it at that when it fails.
It may be just the right combination, the right balance of motivations on both parts, to tip the scales and bring their story to a resolution, in a lone cabin in the woods, covered in snow, at the time of the year when the world is at its darkest but light is secretly growing.
Btw, skinheadbrian: cheer up, we happy-enders are a clear majority in this fandom =)

[morrobay1990.livejournal.com]

Right on target, my darling.

Lots of tension between them; they both want to talk, and they both don't want to talk.

Jack is afraid of what he'll hear, Ennis is afraid of what he has to say...

Thanks so much-

[soulan.livejournal.com]

Mazaher said it all for me. Just want to add that the spaces in between (and at the end) say almost as much as the words.

[morrobay1990.livejournal.com]

thanks, Kim.

I used a quote in Underground about silence, can't find it now...I'll look for it and post it. If I remember correctly, it says exactly what they feel, but can't express.

[morrobay1990.livejournal.com]

It's this

“And now there is merely silence, silence, silence, saying all we did not know.”

[eandj.livejournal.com]

they should talk- it's about time
thanks for writing
I like it
Paula

[morrobay1990.livejournal.com]

Thank you, Paula. I'll try to get Ennis to talk, but it ain't easy!

[expletory.livejournal.com]

I've been out of the loop with this story, my summer was so much busier than I expected it to be. this story keeps on intriguing me. when Ennis spoke of having been fired twice it was a clear, very concrete message about what he had sacrificed for their relationship. I think holding back in fear of the consequences that might come when you let loose is common. Jack keeps holding back but I think it's a pretty natural urge. he doesn't quite delve into the issues when Ennis says it's alright to do so - and still I think it's perfectly natural that he wants to protect himself by holding back. in the last sequence here it seems Jack has settled on it being alright and that it doesn't matter if they don't talk. personally I recognize that technique, to minimize the bad feelings of something by preparing yourself for the fact that there will be no good coming of it and so it doesn't matter - because it's better to do it that way than becoming disappointed when it doesn't work out the way you want to. it's like going into a soccer match telling yourself that your team will lose it, and you only tell yourself that in order to minimize your disappointment afterwards. I cannot quite catch whom is saying what in the exchanges "That was good before." "Yeah." "Don't sound like it was good." "Yeah." but I do like that one of them is trying to convince the other about how it felt.

:) I hope you keep writing. I for one would love to know what happens if, let's say Ennis, keeps on trying to convince Jack about his feelings and Jack keeps on sounding like he's disbelieving of it - I imagine that it would force Ennis to confront Jack with how he's not accepting what he's trying to give. of course I don't know what you plan to happen further, but reading this made me curious about that.

[morrobay1990.livejournal.com]

I hope your summer was busy in a good way.

Thanks for your comment, you really said a lot!

I'm doing an experiment to see if I can write an all-dialogue series...and sometimes it works, sometimes it doesn't.

In the lines you referenced below, I wanted Ennis to try to make up to Jack for being, well, you know...Ennis! He knows Jack wants to talk, but he can't always accept what Jack has to say; so it's Ennis saying it was good and Jack saying "yeah"...like yeah, whatever...but he can't stay mad at Ennis......and neither can I....


I cannot quite catch whom is saying what in the exchanges "That was good before." "Yeah." "Don't sound like it was good." "Yeah." but I do like that one of them is trying to convince the other about how it felt.

thanks again