Dead of Winter

[morrobay1990]

Title: Dead of Winter
Author: morrobay1990
Warning:
Genre: canon
Word count: 100
Disclaimer: They are AP's
♥ Jack














“Hey.”
“What.”
“What time is it?”
“I don’t know...still dark...middle of the damn night.”





“That was good before.”
“Yeah.”
“Don’t sound like it was good.”
“Yeah.”





“Still wanna talk?”
“No.”
“Could if ya want……get up, get the fire going...”
“Don’t make no difference to me.”
“Come on, Jack……got four more days up here...got time to talk if ya want.”
“Said it don’t matter...’sides I’m tired.”
“Well, I’m gettin up, stir that fire up...kinda hungry, too…maybe get some a
that deer meat outta the truck, you want some?...still some JD in that bottle.“
“………………………………………………………………………………………………open another one, then, if we’re gonna talk.”

Comments

[expletory.livejournal.com]

I've been out of the loop with this story, my summer was so much busier than I expected it to be. this story keeps on intriguing me. when Ennis spoke of having been fired twice it was a clear, very concrete message about what he had sacrificed for their relationship. I think holding back in fear of the consequences that might come when you let loose is common. Jack keeps holding back but I think it's a pretty natural urge. he doesn't quite delve into the issues when Ennis says it's alright to do so - and still I think it's perfectly natural that he wants to protect himself by holding back. in the last sequence here it seems Jack has settled on it being alright and that it doesn't matter if they don't talk. personally I recognize that technique, to minimize the bad feelings of something by preparing yourself for the fact that there will be no good coming of it and so it doesn't matter - because it's better to do it that way than becoming disappointed when it doesn't work out the way you want to. it's like going into a soccer match telling yourself that your team will lose it, and you only tell yourself that in order to minimize your disappointment afterwards. I cannot quite catch whom is saying what in the exchanges "That was good before." "Yeah." "Don't sound like it was good." "Yeah." but I do like that one of them is trying to convince the other about how it felt.

:) I hope you keep writing. I for one would love to know what happens if, let's say Ennis, keeps on trying to convince Jack about his feelings and Jack keeps on sounding like he's disbelieving of it - I imagine that it would force Ennis to confront Jack with how he's not accepting what he's trying to give. of course I don't know what you plan to happen further, but reading this made me curious about that.

[morrobay1990.livejournal.com]

I hope your summer was busy in a good way.

Thanks for your comment, you really said a lot!

I'm doing an experiment to see if I can write an all-dialogue series...and sometimes it works, sometimes it doesn't.

In the lines you referenced below, I wanted Ennis to try to make up to Jack for being, well, you know...Ennis! He knows Jack wants to talk, but he can't always accept what Jack has to say; so it's Ennis saying it was good and Jack saying "yeah"...like yeah, whatever...but he can't stay mad at Ennis......and neither can I....


I cannot quite catch whom is saying what in the exchanges "That was good before." "Yeah." "Don't sound like it was good." "Yeah." but I do like that one of them is trying to convince the other about how it felt.

thanks again